Post by account_disabled on Dec 6, 2023 10:37:35 GMT
Back and forth, nothing more natural, right? Dialogue should not be constructed, at least not in the strict sense of the term. It must be seen as a flow of thoughts, a stream of words that comes directly from the character. The writer must identify with that character, know how he thinks and how he can respond. Difficult, of course, especially if it is a character of the opposite sex to us or if he is too distant from us from a social or generational point of view. Consider the historical and social context We haven't always spoken the same way throughout history. Every era has had its own language.
I'm not saying, obviously, that we have to write in Latin or in the vernacular, but that we must consider that in 1500 we cannot make a character speak like a teenager today. Write clean dialogue File down, shorten a dialogue as much as possible. We are writing a story, we must be credible and this does us credit, but we must entertain the reader, not bore Phone Number Data him with useless phrases, excessive colloquialisms or other elements of speech that may appear artificial or even exaggerated. The Queen of the Night by Oreste Pi I asked Oreste to be able to massacre a dialogue from one of his stories. Oreste writes short stories on his blog Chronicles of a hangover. Here is a dialogue that appeared in the story The Queen of the Night . "What were we talking about? Ah yes, the accident and the desire to break the world. Speaking of smashing, you should have seen that fly I got smashed the other night.
At the place where we met we drank a lot eh! Then she wanted to give it to me, what did I do, refuse? I am a polite person! Ahahahahahaha.” The speech here is too long, in my opinion. After the first sentence I would have inserted a “church” to break things up a bit. In the second sentence, in addition to the oversight of a missing accent, two commas were needed. The third is colloquial in the right way, although I would have shortened “About rocking” to a simpler “About”. The next one creates too strong a gap. I would combine it with the following, making it clear that the character met the girl in a club and they drank a lot. For example something like “I met her in a club, we drank several glasses and in the end she wanted to give it to me” or “I met her at the Roxy Bar and after quite a few glasses she wanted to give it to me”. The “what was I doing, refusing?” can be inserted separately. I would eliminate the explicit laughter by making it narrated.
I'm not saying, obviously, that we have to write in Latin or in the vernacular, but that we must consider that in 1500 we cannot make a character speak like a teenager today. Write clean dialogue File down, shorten a dialogue as much as possible. We are writing a story, we must be credible and this does us credit, but we must entertain the reader, not bore Phone Number Data him with useless phrases, excessive colloquialisms or other elements of speech that may appear artificial or even exaggerated. The Queen of the Night by Oreste Pi I asked Oreste to be able to massacre a dialogue from one of his stories. Oreste writes short stories on his blog Chronicles of a hangover. Here is a dialogue that appeared in the story The Queen of the Night . "What were we talking about? Ah yes, the accident and the desire to break the world. Speaking of smashing, you should have seen that fly I got smashed the other night.
At the place where we met we drank a lot eh! Then she wanted to give it to me, what did I do, refuse? I am a polite person! Ahahahahahaha.” The speech here is too long, in my opinion. After the first sentence I would have inserted a “church” to break things up a bit. In the second sentence, in addition to the oversight of a missing accent, two commas were needed. The third is colloquial in the right way, although I would have shortened “About rocking” to a simpler “About”. The next one creates too strong a gap. I would combine it with the following, making it clear that the character met the girl in a club and they drank a lot. For example something like “I met her in a club, we drank several glasses and in the end she wanted to give it to me” or “I met her at the Roxy Bar and after quite a few glasses she wanted to give it to me”. The “what was I doing, refusing?” can be inserted separately. I would eliminate the explicit laughter by making it narrated.